Wednesday, March 18, 2009

Editorial

The whole student body is affected in so many ways. Problems can vary from hate crimes to speeding tickets. But there is one all students face in reality that really affects the way they are able to function or do things in and out of school. In my opinion, I believe school starts is a problem our whole student body faces today.It really has an impact on those who work after school. How? Because work affects how much time you are able to do your homework. If you have a lot of homework, then expect a hard wake up the next morning. Knowing that, it can lead to stress and create an ongoing situation on a daily basis. The situation would include being tired. Tiredness leads to uncontrollable malfunctions to your body which would affect the way you listen, do work, and etc. Later starting times would sooth the body making everyone be more functional during the day. Not only that, I am sure grades would improve too. From my own experiences, comparing to when I didn’t have a job and having one today really shows the affects of starting times. In my opinion, students do not need to have jobs, but work experience is key towards the future in building your resume. Not only that, but money is what everyone craves. It would help out in the future towards college money or whatever you want to buy. With your body having a hard time functioning, getting to school could be rough and getting to class on time is key. Getting tardies can keep repeating itself leading to detentions. Too many tardies can lead to abences and too many absences lead towards failing and you don’t want that. On my part, there should be a later school start so you don’t have to deal with stress all the time. So if nothing changes in the future, I suggest going to bed earlier so waking up in the morning is not a problem. Like I said before, later school starts would sooth the body making everyone be more functional during the day. There would be less tardies equals less detetion time and grades would improve.

1 comment:

  1. 1. Is there a clear point of view? (position)

    Yes.

    2. Does the Op-Ed state the problem and solution simply?

    Yes.

    3. Does the piece address the counter arguments?

    No. Some people believe later school start times would make some activities end too late. You could address that argument by saying it won't be a big deal if activities finish an hour or two later than they do now, and there might be more people not in such acvities than those who actually are.

    4. Is the Op-Ed interesting?

    Yes.

    5. Are the paragraphs organized logically?

    It is not in paragraph form, but there are bodies of text that could easily be separated into paragraphs in the order they are now.

    6. Does each paragraph develop an idea to support the thesis?

    Yes.

    7. Is the writing clear?

    Yes.

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