Peer Edit

Peter Bryan
1. In my opinion, I don't think there are any areas for more detail or improvement. I thought he did a great job overall providing everything he needed to give the reader information.
2. Additional sources could include Peter himself from his own perspective. I believe the lead does get your attention a bit, but a little more work wouldn't hurt.
3. The 450 words do contain some defined scenes. Some of them go into detail on how students transfer from high school to college in running and how running is totally different from high school.
4. For the next 300 words, I really don't know what else Peter can add. The story is good as is for me. Maybe if he wants to add a part from his own perspective, then that would be great.

Jeff Curry
1. There are small things here and there that can be better. Going into other seasons can help add more detail in the story.
2. Other sources could include different coaches or players from another level like college. The lead does involve you because it gives you information on the sport and more.
3. There isn't really a strong scene in the story, but adding some more detail in the story to create one shouldn't be hard. Talking about own perspective would work.
4. I thought the story was good. For the next 300 words, talking about other clubs and own perspective could easily be met.